Monday 31 March 2014

Maisie's 5 Sentence Challenge

I enter the tunnel and start running down its narrow path.

I notice side passages branching off to the left and right.

All of the side paths appear the same as the main tunnel, dirty, dark and noisy.

I hear whoosh and a heard of footsteps with people rushing in different directions.

I look at my map and realise that I'm not in a tunnel but on the London Underground.

6 comments:

  1. Wow Maisie, well done! I like the way you have led me through the unknown and then I appear in the underground. Very accomplished writing!

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  2. Very proud of your sentences sweetheart. Well done. Keep up the good work. Love mummy & daddy.x

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  3. great work year 2!

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  4. Louise Killeen4 April 2014 at 02:40

    I loved how you managed to tell a whole story with a beginning, a middle and an end in just five sentences Maisie! Fantastic!

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  5. Wow! You've used wonderful descriptive words! I loved 'narrow', 'dirty', 'dark' and 'noisy'. What a great ending!

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  6. Well done Maisie. I love the ending. Fantastic xxx

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