Elsa went to the darkest tunnel ever, but
someone
lives there. “Agh....” she screamed loudly. She tryed to
escape from the tunnel and Elsa used all her power. Unfortunately, her power
didn`t work.
Suddenly, a handsome prince appeared in front of
her with a beautiful smile…
Suspenseful! What happens next Joy?
ReplyDeleteGreat sentences Joy, I love the way you have kept the reader guessing about who lives there. I'd love to meet the handsome prince with the beautiful smile...
ReplyDeleteFantastic sentences Joy. I really like how you have used speech and an ellipse at the end to let us know there was more to come.
ReplyDeleteYou have used some great sentence starters like "suddenly" and "unfortunately."
From Miss D 5SC Team
Sumner, Christchurch, NZ