One sunny,
warm and glorious day a little girl went to the beach.
The beach
was so busy that the little girl decided to play in the silvery cool rock pools
away from the crowds.
The rock
pools were also busy with children playing with fishing nets trying to catch
crabs so the little girl had an idea.
Beyond the
rock pools was a cove in which a tunnel was in the rocks so the little girl
would go there and play.
Once in the tunnel the little girl could see slimy sea
weed and crusty barnacles on the walls the little girl decided the busy beach
wasn't so bad after all and ran as fast a Cheetah back to the beach!
Fantastic work jess!
ReplyDeleteWow! I love the description of the rock pool. Great SO sentence. Awesome to start your sentence with beyond. Super description of sea weed and barnacles. A great simile to end with. Well done Jess. Mr. Needle
ReplyDeleteWow Jessica, what amazing sentences. I really like how you have started each sentence and captured the readers attention. You even have some simile.
ReplyDeleteI think that next time you could try the 100 word challenge!
From Miss D 5SC Team
Sumner, Christchurch, New Zealand.