I walked into a dark cave. In the cave it was
cold and damp. At the back of the cave there was a tunnel. In the tunnel there
was a mysterious bear, so I ran as fast as a wolf to get out.
Layton, I really liked your description of the cave and tunnel. You have used some great adjectives like cold and damp. I like that you used a simile to finish off your sentences "as fast as a wolf." Next time, to make your writing even better, you could write add one more sentence.
As fast as a wolf? That's fast! Great description.
ReplyDeleteLayton, I really liked your description of the cave and tunnel. You have used some great adjectives like cold and damp. I like that you used a simile to finish off your sentences "as fast as a wolf."
ReplyDeleteNext time, to make your writing even better, you could write add one more sentence.
Miss D (5SC Team)
Christchurch NZ