Monday, 31 March 2014

Harry's 5 Sentence Challenge



Mr Pencil Man was standing in an empty room.
He looked down and saw a pencil and piece of paper.
Mr pencil man drew a tunnel and it started to pop out of the paper.
He heard lots of Roaring !  around him.   
 In the distance he saw an ENORMOUS DINASAUR running  towards him,
he drew a door and got home SAFETLY.

2 comments:

  1. Hello Harry.
    What an amazing adventure you have thought of. I love the idea of a magic pencil that can draw things that come to life! What a good idea! I love how you used capital letters for the important parts of your story. I'm also glad that he could get home safely because of the magic!

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  2. Wow Harry. Reading your story made me smile, what a wonderful adventure you have thought up! I like how you have used capital letter and full stops and tried using exclamation marks as well. I hope Mr Pencil Man can rub out that dinosaur so it doesn't crash through the door.
    Next time you could try using some different sentence starters.

    From Miss D, 5SC Team
    Sumner, Christchurch, New Zealand

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