Sunday, 11 May 2014

Matthias' 5 Sentence Challenge



Slowly, the black shiny train pulls into the station.
Cases as big as boulders are pushed along the platform.
Excited, happy families are off on an adventure.
Smiling, the man picks up his suitcase and walks quickly over to the ticket man.
The bored old ticket collector who has a frowning face grumpily collects the tickets.
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4 comments:

  1. Jenga11 May 2014 at 13:34

    I love your description of the ticket collector Matthias!

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  2. Anonymous12 May 2014 at 15:09

    Amazing super sentences Matthias! You are very clever x

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  3. Mrs Skinner (Team100) Bristol, UK19 May 2014 at 04:39

    A comment was left for this post by Team5SC but it does not seem to be here!

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  4. Mrs Tucker (5SC Team)21 May 2014 at 13:07

    Hi Matthias,
    Thank you for entering the 5SC, I'm sorry my comment is so late!
    What I like about your writing...
    You have told a story with your five sentences, rather than write isolated sentences.
    You have used fabulous opening to your sentences.
    What I would love to see next time...
    Do you think that you could ask your readers a question as one of your sentences next time?
    Have a go!
    Well done and keep writing. :)
    Mrs Tucker (5SC Team) Wirral, UK.

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