Sunday 11 May 2014

Harry's 5 Sentence Challenge



A man ran to get a ticket to get on a train.
He showed it to the ticket officer so he could get through the gates.
He got through the gates to platform 5.
He got on the train and put his luggage away and sat down .
He had a nice journey going to Italy.
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2 comments:

  1. Jenga11 May 2014 at 13:35

    A train to Italy. How exciting. Well done Harry.

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  2. Mrs Tucker (5SC Team)21 May 2014 at 13:05

    Hi Harry,
    Thank you for entering the 5SC, I'm sorry my comment is so late!
    What I like about your writing...
    You have told a story with your five sentences, rather than write isolated sentences.
    You have used some exciting vocabulary in your writing too!
    What I would love to see next time...
    Do you think that you could ask your readers a question as one of your sentences next time?
    Have a go!
    Well done and keep writing. :)
    Mrs Tucker (5SC Team) Wirral, UK.

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